Reflections of You - FINAL DRAFT
So here's a final draft of the song I've been working on for the Essentials in Songwriting course. The feedback you've given has been amazing everyone! Thanks for bearing with me as I've been rewriting the verses and whatnot. It's a way different song than it was at the first draft, but it's definitely stronger for it, and i think it much better accomplishes my goal of a song about serving like Christ served us.
As suggested, I have rewritten the second verse to fit the rest of the song, and I think it works, but I'm interested to hear your thoughts. I added a bunch more guitar and vocal layers so it's more interesting (thanks to my wife elizabeth for her angelic AAAAAH's on the choruses). Here's the new lyrics (please see pdf file for accurate chord changes).
Reflections of You
Intro: D G (vamp)
Verse 1:
Dsus2
You know our hearts, You know our failings
G Dsus2
Yet you called us by name and told us 'Follow Me,
G
And you'll be My hands and feet'
Dsus2
You taught us to love and serve the broken
G Dsus2
Then You laid down Your life and paid our penalty
G
Glory to our Servant King
Prechorus:
Em
We want to be like You, Jesus
G
So we ask You, please...
Chorus:
Bm A/C# D
Consume our hearts and minds, like Holy Fire
Bm A/C# D A
Burn away the old and leave new life inside
Bm A/C# D
Strengthen us to live the life You've called us to
Bm A/C# D A
We'll represent Your love, make us reflections of You
Intro:
Verse 2:
You know our pasts, come be our future
All that we have is to offer ourselves to you
Come and fill us up anew
Because we want to give You more
Prechorus:
Double Chorus:
Instrumental Bridge: Bm A D G Bm A G
Bm A D G Bm A Asus (into chorus Bm)
Final Chorus:
Outro (same as Intro Chords): Vamp between D and G chords
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Thanks for listening and for the honest feedback. I appreciate it!